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Red X
Jun 29, 2007 11:16:22 GMT -5
Post by redx on Jun 29, 2007 11:16:22 GMT -5
Name: Red X Age: unknown Gender: Male Description: Dressed in black with red X's and a skull Personality: A lone wolf out looking for a good time History: Red used to live at home with his mother and father and three sisters being the older out of the siblings he noticed his family didn't have enough to feed all of them. So one day he saw an old lady walk out of a bank and stole her purse, and since then he has be stuck on the life of theivery. First it was for his family then it was for himself he slowly learned to get past any Guard system or pokemon any building had. He quickly learned acrobatic skills that helped him be better than what he used to be. Creating a suit he started to be well known as Red X always leaving a X at the scene. Slowly noticing Pokemon battles and how useful they can be Red X started stealing from top pokemon and always leafted them with an X. Starter Pokemon: Larvitar Items: Pokeballs, Potions
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Red X
Jun 29, 2007 15:12:00 GMT -5
Post by Seraphinu on Jun 29, 2007 15:12:00 GMT -5
I'm not sure whether I'm authorized to review characters... but this definately needs a whole lot of work. And Kura hasn't been on for a while. I'm his only other active staff member.
First of all, and I know Kura(Prof. Palm) was a little vauge on the rules, but I don't think he would approve of a character so blantantly based off of a character from a T.V. show. Second, your Personality and Description are VERY lacking. One sentence =/= equal an adequte description of an appearence or a personality. Look at my character. Just her personality is longer than your WHOLE profile.
And Third, your history is very overdone, not to mention clique. Make it more original.
So... NOT ACCEPTED
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Red X
Jul 1, 2007 17:10:57 GMT -5
Post by Dark on Jul 1, 2007 17:10:57 GMT -5
Isn't Red X a make off of that dude in Teen Titans? If that is so then Seraphi is again right...but this is an no copy off zone. The Personaility also has to be more then one line, so Seraphi's alos correct on that
Not Accepted also by Dark
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Red X
Jul 12, 2007 18:09:19 GMT -5
Post by Prof. Palm on Jul 12, 2007 18:09:19 GMT -5
These staff are right. You can do better than to steal a crimanal from Teen Titans. Also, I don't really like lone wolf theivery types. But you can side with Team Dark, once I start them out....
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